[Genkai Hatsudensho (Nakamo)] Onna Gal Joushi to Furin suru Hanashi 5

やっぱ皆この作品批判するよな… 1から3までは良かったのに4と5は展開も何がしたいのかわからんまま終わったからね…

what is the author tryna cook brah

Chapter 1-3 was ayt and it's best to stop there. No wonder translators never touched 4-5. Author literally pulled garbage out of his ass.

Good ending i guess, might as well orgy with his wife and gyaru-oh

No way this mofo actually took that one guys time travel comment just to waste it

Happy(?) ending i guess. Not like someone who had a threesome gets to keep it that way forever anyways. Life isn't just about sex afterall.

it's decided that you only need to read ch 1-3 only as the main plot was 3some and not this kind garbage plot

"If that sounds interesting to you, I would be very happy if you checked it out there as well. Thank you again, and I hope you’ll continue to support my work." Dude is actually delusional. There was no wide range of replies, everyone was shitting on that and the fact he straight up deceived his buyers. And that guy wants to actually add Extra Chapter to this garbage.

From his account: "Thank you so much to everyone who read this work. I also truly appreciate all of your comments and messages. I have read every one of them. I received a wide range of thoughts and feedback, and many of them gave me useful insight or made me reflect deeply. I hope to carry those things forward into my future work. Once again, thank you to everyone who took the time to read this series. As for what comes next, I currently have a few things in the works. First, I am planning a collected edition of My Gyaru Boss and Our Affair episodes 1 through 5. I am also considering adding an extra bonus episode to the collection if possible. In addition, I have ideas for a new work, and I plan to keep moving forward with that as well. I will continue to post announcements and progress updates on Pixiv. I also plan to share more casual posts on Pommu, such as early-stage ideas and more chatty, informal updates."

Author turned the entire series into a shit show with his cuckold fantasies. What a waste of talent!

I like ntr stuff but this was just stupid

The mc’s wife is just a plot device to make him not a lonely cuck

dogshit. i mean if the author want blonde to back with the tall dude, author can just ends this up in 4th chapter when they having sex again. whats the point of this chapter?

What was the point of the Timetravel? Reiko getting almost raped in front of the MC who gets beaten up, that Gyaru-oh saving the day, Reiko getting married to the guy and to top it all off MC IMAGINING having sex with her. How much more can you make your MC a cuck? Honestly, whoever bought the first 3 volumes and got slapped literally with the 4th and 5th Chapter? Try to get a refund. It's actually ridiculous. Trying to sell it as a Harem Threeway Story, heck even the Wife was fine with it during the 3rd Chapter and suddenly introducing the second male lead who gets the FMC in the end while the MC just looks like a loser the whole time since the moment he suddenly debuted? Nah, fam. You getting fucked in the comments on your social media? Deserved. And I would imagine that your future works aren't going to make much numbers either (it HALVED from 2000 to just 800 with the 4th Chapter) considering you can just shift such a story after 3 whole chapters.

wtf happened here XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD??????????????????????

Nakamo really made a hiccup in his career just to gain NTR customers, lol. I mean, I don't hate this, and I doubt Japanese customers will hate this either (NTR/Cheating is really popular on FANZA), but Nakamo really could've just kept milking semi-vanilla works before pivoting to full NTR works in newer titles. I really don't understand the minds of Japanese artists, man....

amazing series! May the author make another like this

The author really decided to make some bs after part 3 instead of just ending it, what a moron

Fucking garbage

Honestly just straight up laughing my ass of in confusion. Like wtf did he just time travel? and did he get cucked?? and who even tf is the gyaru bf??? like no hate but nahh they introduced the dude out of nowhere and made the original mc turn to a side character. The author did a fk up imo but its his work and he has the power so cant really complain and tell him what he was supposed to do lmao.

They should've wrote the gyaru-oh as a good guy. You know that chill guy where you can share your hobby with, like pokemon cards or something. And then they proceed with wholesome foursome buddy-buddy wife swapping, where each of them respect each other's partners. Medetashi medetashi

给我气笑了。这到底在画什么剧情呀？ Ntr和后宫两边不讨好。结局真的让人无语。白白浪费了这么好的画工。

wow umm interesting so she ends up with her ex but still cheat son him lol im glad i didnt favorite this series.

The anger has passed. Lemme just delete the first three in this series from my favorites. It's dogshit, you know where it belongs.

到底看了什麼 以為用時空穿梭把辣妹上司從渣男奪回來 結果兩年後結婚？ 渣男從良了？雖然上司還是跟男主做 好像也沒關係 各自出軌 不 感覺把渣男也綠了 反正上司也只是炮友 要做ntr還不如直接把渣男和老婆也幹一炮 不上不下 但有一說一 畫風很好 戰鬥畫面很足 6.5/10 良品

would have been perfect if his wife cucked with the other guy. author pussied out.

did he just eat his damn c*m

So then... What's the point? Like, I know the "they cheat but then they return to their respective partners" is not a new trope. But why write it like that?? And here I thought Alp1smando's recent doujin series ending left a sour taste. God, can't they just pull a misaoka and say sike in the sequel?

For those claiming people are 'crashing out' just because there’s no NTR—maybe you should take a look at the title of this book first? Did you come all the way here just to preach to us? Oh, right, I forgot you're not here to 'goon' to those beautiful girls; I guess I should respect your weird fetish. First off, the Gyaru-oh character has zero depth. That scene where he saves the female lead was literally just the MC’s dream. The only reason he abandoned her in the first place was that he was 'having too much fun' and just flat-out forgot about her. Haha, 'happiness'? Looking for a 'everyone is happy' ending in an NTR script? You're making me laugh my ass off.

men NTR good women NTR bad ? double standard why why i'm gender who fanboys vanilla ? fanboy or fangirl ffm or mmf harem or reverse harem MC or feMC male pilot or female pilot both both

Chuds lost their NTR story and crashed the fuck out. While this story lacked consistency, it was far from a garbage story. It takes away the power fantasy element the virgin ass tiny dicked losers who could never in a million years tap shit like that so has to experience it in Hentai, we all here to goon, stop projecting yourselves onto the MC and crashing out like genuine children and fap and move on. author still serving up fire art and wanted the best for every character, wrote up a scenario where everyone can be happy.

what the f is this plot

First off the author could've just scrapped the whole idea of time travel and shit, instead he should've had not just introduce the og bf as a character and just decided to continue on with the threesome/harem parts. All of the shit that's been done in part 3, 4 and 5 just feels unnecessary. Especially in part 4 when the author decides to make the gyaru got back together with her og boyfriend which kinda fucked up the entire story and whatever the hell it was going for.

The concept of doujin authors being artists before writers is highly evident with this series. Dude took what was a decent story going down a certain path, and railroaded it into... this. The only saving grace at this point is the art, the story that came with it might as well be nonexistent.

ngl, gyaru dude is good, the mc and the gyaru girl are the bad ones here

Damn.. I was thinking the author would send mc back in time and do sum crazy shit but he just did this?? Bro now this is just an average cheating ntr doujin.

First of all, I hate NTR but I don't even hate the gyaru dude funny enough. He's not a bad guy at all actually lol. What I hate is the author and his inability in writing a cohesive story and essentially betraying his readers that he lured in with the first two, i guess three? parts of this doujin. He quite literally turned the protagonist into a fucking loser. That last sex scene was literally his imagination and nothing more lmao. Idk what this author was trying to do, because I dont see NTR fans enjoying this either because its too tame and half assed in that regard too. I hope this author personally never writes a story again and instead just dedicates his art to illustrating other authors stories if anything.

The plot kinda weird but acceptable for me, the comment section go crazy with this one

This is as wholesome as you can get, the only one who really got ntr'd was MC's wife

That suck ,fking Disappointed

Get cucked loser

No matter how hard the female lead fell for him, we are supposed to be on the MC's side, right?! How could we ever accept this? I bet a ton of people already tried to warn the author, but he insisted on doing it his way. You really can't have any expectations for this kind of creator. No matter how good the beginning is, once their brain short-circuits, they’ll just shove a mouthful of sh*t down your throat."

Thanks guys. For the sake of this discussion, I actually went back to re-read the Japanese dialogue in Chapter 4. That 'Gyaru-oh' guy just casually thought to himself that he 'forgot because he was having too much fun'—who knows if he was out hooking up with random girls? We have the God-eye view and saw his inner monologue, so how could we possibly stand the female lead crawling back to him so easily? Also, his 'heroic actions' in this chapter? We don't even know if that would happen in reality; that's just the version of the Gyaru-oh created by the MC’s own inferiority complex! And think about what appeared in this chapter: University life? Post-marriage sex? Those were all just scenes from the MC’s dream! This means more than half of the book was literally just a dream!

So what was the point of parts 1-3? It was great until he added random NTsr and double down on it. Hopefully he doesn't do this type of shit again cuz his art is great. Art 8/10 Story part 1-3, 7 to 8 /10 Parts 4 and 5, 3/ 10 ( kinda dog shit)

I mean its a good ending so i’ll take it

Kudos to the artist. He wanted to tell the story he wanted to tell and he did so until the end, not letting the harassment from morons on Twitter change his vision. You may like it or not, but I, personally, respect his courage.

Eh, idk if it’s that bad. Seems like the dark guy has always liked the fl, whereas the mc has always objectified her, and it took the mc to go back in time to see that she really was happy with him if you look at the flashbacks before the wedding panel. Idk if this is the end, but it’s ok if it is. Definitely a weird and bittersweet ending and I see why some would feel that their expectations were betrayed. I hope it doesn’t continue to be some ntr drama where they start swinging because I would really hate it then. But yeah I would’ve preferred a normal harem-esque story.

Bro, I was defending him because I was sure he was cooking something fun like the previous chapters. I have zero problem with NTR btw, but this chapter is reaaaaally bad. Holy fuck. Going back in time just to do this with it? Trash. That last fake NTR scene? Trash. Damn, I rarely get dissapointed by a H author since it's really not that serious, but he did it, lol.

he fumbled again 😭😭 yea atp Part 1-3 is canon

@mlaw974, The Gyaru-oh was never established as a bad guy in the first place, but he was introduced as a playboy. Gyaru-oh is probably not even aware that the Gyaru boss is currently being a fuck buddy with the MC that time. He's just someone who used to be her fuck buddy in the past as well and in chapter 4 he didn't even tried to blackmail her or anything they just went out for a dinner and then he brought up their past relationship and invited her to sex which she willingly accepted.